Wednesday, December 3, 2008
Berry McKee
Video Essay Critiques
It was very polished and well organized.
It sounds like your voice is echoing a little bit.
Some pictures had nothing to do with what was being said.
Needs music.
Patrice
Music was great, but should have been lower than your voice.
Enunciate less.
Grainy pictures.
Coleen
Effects where great.
Music was louder than your voice.
Too much time about photography in general that should have been spent on silver eye itself.
Titles.
Julie
Great information.
Too many transition effects.
Jenna
Great definition of doors, helps to introduce door art.
Slow down.
Too much information outside of Pittsburgh.
Jumbled.
A lot of pauses.
Ariel
Poppie Yay!!!!!!
Focus on Pittsburgh.
Transitions.
Sound would be nice. lol
Emily
Nice music.
Muddy voice.
Some of the angles of the pictures made it hard to read the chalk art.
Slides too fast.
Jill
Cool psychedelic thing!!!
Louder.
Change videos more often.
All of the stills used the same effect, try some others.
Sarah
Nice blue prints and old pictures, they look hard to find.
Talk faster and less monotone.
Cut down interview time a little bit.
Monday, November 24, 2008
in class 17 comments on videos
Katie
Awesome range of pictures and use of diverse images
Speak slower
Slow down the effects/ time between the different murals
Maybe add subtitles to where the works are
Filter sound more
Patrice
Make your narration louder
Add some different transitions between the videos and pictures
Good use of video and pictures combined
Work on editing the video maybe make it clearer
Find some other fountain pictures maybe the point (are you trying to focus just on those two?)
Watch out for repeating images
Colleen
Add a title
Great choice of background music that fits the images
Make your voice louder
Great use of different photos and many images
Add credits
Julie
Add a title and who it is by
Try to fix the grain of the videos ( the purple part in the first video)
Great transitions
In the narration, watch the puffs of air that appear on the track
Add credits and fade into the music at the end
Jenna
Add a title
Work on fixing problems in the narrations
Slow down the narration
Add some music whether at the end, the beginning, or the under the narration
Nice variety of pictures
Ariel
Cool title and use of a wide range of pictures
Check the value/ make it louder
Add some transitions
Add your name to the title
maybe get a picture from South side tattoo of the outside of the door so you can read it
Gill
A title more time for the title
Turn up the narration
All the sounds needs to go up
Watch the grain of the images and the videos
Cool use of the music visualize I like the message at the end
Add some transitions between the music- fade in and fade out
Sarah
Add a title
Add background music
Good use of historical pictures
Maybe slow down the transitions
Slow down the narration
Good use of video
Add some transitions between the interview and the narration and make the volume the same between the interviewer and the intervieweeCritiques for Videos
Great pictures
Slow down voice
Slower transitions
Filter more sound
Patrice
Voice should be higher than audio
Video importation is good
Make it flow a little easier
Possibly focus on more fountains?
Colleen
Voice is great
More pictures
Maybe incorporate videos
Transitions
Julie
Make voice higher
Great description of the process
Ik you know this but fix the video audio with your own
Music? – make a bit louder to hear
Jenna
Talk slower
Movement of pictures slower
Pictures are very nice
Work on voice incorporated into the project
Ariel
Fix your audio
Focus more on Pittsburgh
Great description and research
Focus more on the art of tattooing rather than the world
Emily
Articulate
Pictures are really well chosen
Music throughout audio?
Gillian
Voice needs to be louder
Music engraved?
Work on the space transitioning
Great video
Sarah
Audio louder
Good historical information
Use more new pictures
Ending a little abrupt
Sunday, November 23, 2008
Julie's Critiques
The information was very informative
The still clips went by too fast at the one part with the buses
Speak slower
Music in the background?
Patrice
The music went along really well
Keep the still images longer in the beginning
Lower the volume of the music and increase the voice soundtrack
The images turned out a little grainy
Colleen
The movement of your pictures was awesome
Increase your voice volume
Jenna
The pictures are well taken
Maybe take and keep a full shot of a door rather then moving up and down them all
Show more of the doors and could even keep them up longer if there aren’t enough
Ariel
The history and background was very informative
Check the copyrights of the photos you use
Show tattoos that are pitt focused
Increase volume
Emily
The addition of the text was a great idea
Fix your audio to try and make it clearer
Maybe give motion to the pictures
Music in the background?
Jill
Increase the volume of the audio
Video was a little shaky
Speed up transitions
Sharpen up pictures
Sarah
The video of the fireworks looked really great with the addition of the interview
Add music in the background
Pause more in between sentences
Figure out a conclusion
1 Love and 3 Hates: My Critiques of Classmates' Videos
Katie:
1. GREAT colorful, interesting, intriguing photos
1. speaking much too fast
2. you have a bit too much information
3. many of your photos don't correlate with information/narration
Colleen:
1. fabulous photos that connect the audience with the information you are conveying
1. as you know...make your audio louder...
2. ...make your music quieter
3. some of your photo transitions are too fast
Julie:
1. you have very interesting and specific images presented along with great information and video
1. put your audio up
2. fancy transitions are unnecessary
3. some photos are unclear
Jenna:
1. great and interesting photos
1. photos move too fast
2. your talking is way too fast
3. too much door history at the beginning
Ariel:
1. your subject matter is so intriguing and entertaining
1. you need more of your own photos, that you've taken
2. not enough information present
3. too much unnecessary information at the beginning about tattoo history
Emily:
1. great background information, very thorough
1. audio is too noisy
2. photos are a bit repetitive
3. maybe take away some of the words/questions
Gill:
1. great creative ways of portraying music, esp. with its visual portrayal
1. your audio is much too quiet
2. get rid of the black boxes
3. some pictures are too blurry
Sarah:
1. great firework footage
1. audio too quiet
2. too much unneeded beginning Cathedral information
3. talk too fast
Film Critiques by Patrice
1 Love and 3 Hates: My Critiques of Classmates' Videos
Katie:
1. GREAT colorful, interesting, intriguing photos
1. speaking much too fast
2. you have a bit too much information
3. many of your photos don't correlate with information/narration
Colleen:
1. fabulous photos that connect the audience with the information you are conveying
1. as you know...make your audio louder...
2. ...make your music quieter
3. some of your photo transitions are too fast
Julie:
1. you have very interesting and specific images presented along with great information and video
1. put your audio up
2. fancy transitions are unnecessary
3. some photos are unclear
Jenna:
1. great and interesting photos
1. photos move too fast
2. your talking is way too fast
3. too much door history at the beginning
Ariel:
1. your subject matter is so intriguing and entertaining
1. you need more of your own photos, that you've taken
2. not enough information present
3. too much unnecessary information at the beginning about tattoo history
Emily:
1. great background information, very thorough
1. audio is too noisy
2. photos are a bit repetitive
3. maybe take away some of the words/questions
Gill:
1. great creative ways of portraying music, esp. with its visual portrayal
1. your audio is much too quiet
2. get rid of the black boxes
3. some pictures are too blurry
Sarah:
1. great firework footage
1. audio too quiet
2. too much unneeded beginning Cathedral information
3. talk too fast
Saturday, November 22, 2008
Video Critiques
Katie – A little fast spoken
A lot of “sprout fund” logo shots in beginning
A little fast with the ken burns sometimes
Great images of people actually painting the murals
Awesome specific examples
Patrice – Love the song!
However, turn it down a little maybe, and raise your vocals..
Pictures a little of focus
A lot of the same pictures
Julie – awesome pictures showing the process
Music up a little.
Adjust audio
And obviously video audio needs tweeking
Jenna – Talking super fast
Really fast moving pictures (little choppy)
Good match up with some of the visual with the audio & good quotes
More photos of the actual decorated doors in Oakland?
Ariel – allowed to use that many pictures that aren’t your own?
Less global – you know that
Good shots of inside of south side tattoo – fact you talked to guy is a good thing – shots of people getting them done, looking for what they want – good
Didn't get to hear audio with visual like it will be in the end - so can't judge that
Emily – no music while talking? Little grainy with the voice anyway
A little fast with the pictures.
AWESOME title effects
Spelled sponsored wrong
Gillian – really super low audio
What is your topic?
I think you used interviews – which is good
A lot of music visualizer – find other images maybe?
Sarah – nice drawings of cathedral for design plan
Good statistics
Up on the audio – music?
Images moving a little fast
Good interview voice behind with video&audio
Ending?
----colleen